Wednesday, 9 June 2010

This Silence

It drips on me

this silence

through the cracks

in my solid ceiling

it seeps

leaving patterns

a tiny tracery

of unspoken words

like delicate fronds

on the cold hard concrete

of today

Time silvered dominos

topple, a tidal wave

of tiny dots


and falling

and falling


once again

the empty room

the silence


Silence seems to have been the theme for today as I also wrote this - Silence

- Susannah Bec 2010


Anonymous said...

The flow creates a almost mourning rhythm, love it.

Susannah said...

Hi Ladan and thanks for your comment, it is good to see you here. :-)

Robert Lloyd said...

I think this is an absolutely beautiful poem. The visual in my head when reading this is wonderful. If I could do anything other than stick figures I would love to paint, draw, are create the picture. I love it.

Susannah said...

Thanks Robb. :-)

Michaela said...

It depends on the situation. But silence can be wonderful. I especially like the "inner" silence. It can be a very positive feeling. Kind of nothing bothers me.

Susannah said...

Hi Michaela,

I love silence too, in fact most of my day is spent in silence with just the little interruptions of everyday background sounds - but the silence that prompted this writing was a strange slighly surreal silence, somehow it felt different as though it had more weight, more meaning.

Good to see you. x

Carrie Burtt said...

Beautifully written. I love the name of your blog. :-)

Susannah said...

Thanks Carrie - and it is good to meet you. :-)

Jingle said...

cute and smart poem!

Susannah said...

Thanks Jingle. :-)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

"It dri[ps on me this silence through the cracks in my solid ceiling" is absolutely brilliant. You inspire! The mood, the way the poem is placed on the page, all perfection. Wow.

Susannah said...

Sherry, thank you so much for your positive comments, I am so glad you 'get' my writing. :-)

It's great to see you here.

Mary said...

I like this a lot. Sometimes to ME, silence is the loudest sound!

Andy said...

Silence is good in small doses.

Beautifully captured.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love it, silence that drips on you from the ceiling..........

Jinksy said...

The more of your poems I read, the more I like their cobweb fragility - you have a light touch with your words. Thank you . :)

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone for your kind words, I do appreciate them. Thank you. x

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