Friday, 6 August 2010

Sanctuary - poetry prompt #9

This was written for -
the Poetry Blogroll - Poets United
The Thursday Think Tank - Prompt #9
My first time writing from a poetry prompt, but the title of this one spoke to me. :-)


Behind the facade
the kerb appeal
of outer skin
are many rooms

each has a
wooden door

some lead
to tiny spaces
filled with books

another to a vast hall
where there is dancing

from some
you can hear
the strains
of distant music

or bird song,
or the gentle lapping of waves

some doors are ajar
shedding spangles of light

some are tightly closed
but their handles are
bright and shiny
from use

but, there is one special door

It is painted turquoise
richly decorated with birds
and seashells and sparkling with
pieces of sea tumbled glass

it has a perfect heart shaped keyhole
opened by the little gold key
that hangs from the ribbon
around my neck

it is the door
to the sanctuary

the one
that exists



- Susannah Bec 2010


Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...


A really delightful read, which ultimately leads into your place of sanctuary.


Susannah said...

Thanks very much Eileen. :-)

Carrie Burtt said...

Love the flow of this poem and how it builds up to and leads you to the true sanctuary...inside of you.
Beautiful poetry! :-)

Susannah said...

Thanks Carrie. :-)

Diane T said...

Is kerb a typo? Don't know what it means although I looked it up. I like the form of your poem and how it leads to your own personal sanctuary. Very well written!

Susannah said...

Hi Diane, trying googling 'kerb appeal' perhaps the expression is not used in the US?

Thanks very much for your visit, It's good to meet you. :-)

Gerry Boyd said...

very nice writing.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much Gerry. :-)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

A FANTASTIC poem! I love it so much! The "many rooms", one "where there is dancing", the sounds of "bird song or gentle lapping of waves". And how beautifully decorated with favorite things is the door to your inner sanctuary. A wonderful poem, I loved every bit of it!!!!!

Susannah said...

Hi Sherry, I am so glad you liked it.
Thanks very much for your positive comments, I really do appreciate them.

It is good to see you fellow ocean lover. ;-)

Paul Andrew Russell said...

This is beautiful, Susannah, especially the following stanza...

'It is painted turquoise
richly decorated with birds
and seashells and sparkling with
pieces of sea tumbled glass'

I really enjoyed reading this poem.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much Paul and I am glad to see that you have joined up at Poets United too!

It is always nice to see you. :-)

Felicitas said...

This is really beautiful. I love that you wrote of the sanctuary within, as mine is there too!

Susannah said...

Thanks Felicitas, I think the lucky ones of us find that sanctuary inside. Glad you have too. :-)

It is good to meet you.

Oren Stern said...

you should try some of your poetry at the Conjunction forums --

they offer great critique there, nice community.

also, feel free to visit The God Bolt,

and i look forward to reading more of your work

Susannah said...

Thanks Oren, I will check them out.

Thank you for your visit, it is nice to meet you. :-)

Jingle said...

pleasant piece.
excellent first time entry for a prompt.

Susannah said...

Thanks for your comment Jingle.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Susannah, Thank you for visiting my site and leaving such kind comments. It means a great deal, coming from such an accomplished poet as yourself:)

Susannah said...

Sherry, I have been so enjoying your writing, I am glad to have discovered your blog and you. :-)

ninotaziz said...

Dear Susannah,

I love the shape and sound of your poetry especially...

it is the door
to the sanctuary

the one
that exists



Susannah said...

Thanks very much ninotaziz. :-)

It is nice to meet you.

David Rheins said...

I like your visual technique on this one.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much David. :-)

Michaela said...

I want to come to this "house" too.
I want to roam every room.
And I want to dance to the music.
And I want to listen to the sound of the waves.. ah, wonderful.

Susannah said...

It is wonderful to see you Michaela, thank you very much for visiting. :-)

dcwright02 said...

very nice poem... I love the flow and the culmination of the true sanctuary! I'll definitely check back often!

Susannah said...

Hello dc and thanks for your comment - it's good to meet you. :-)

Charles said...

The many rooms I believe is the many moods we display....In the end we can only be our true selves....We return to the sanctuary.

Susannah said...

Hello Charles, good to see you again. Thanks for your comment. :-)

Fireblossom said...

Ahhhhhh, I'm liking this. Keep that key close...everyone needs a sanctuary. :-)

Susannah said...

Thanks Fireblossom!

It's good to meet you. :-)

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