Monday, 30 August 2010

to feel the storm building. . .

The wind whipped her hair
wrapping it around her face

she reached up and pushed it
back behind her ears

She was too close to the edge
she knew it but didn't care

It was exhilarating

to feel the spray from the crashing waves

to feel the storm building

She squinted her eyes
against the rushing wind

licking her lips
tasting the salt
tasting the ocean

Towering clouds raced across the bruised sky
grey and purple, like a vast mountain range

Her heart was racing

low rumbles of thunder moved closer
the air crackled with electricity

The silver black ocean
hurled itself at the shore
crashing over the slippery rocks

She was soaked to the skin
wet strands of hair
wound around her neck

her eyes stinging
and streaming with tears

Streaks of lightning
turned the sky into a lightbox

and the waves roared
the thunder crashed

and she could no longer hear herself think

She screamed into the sound

joining it

adding her energy

She felt passion run through her like a storm
and she was the waves crashing
and the arcing lights
in the electric sky

She felt the thunder
like a force within

. . . and the wind just kept on howling

She fell to her knees
clinging on to the slippery black slate

she was spent



One thought repeating
over and over in her ocean filled mind

If only I could stay here

forever. . .

This is an older piece that I have altered and partially rewritten
for the Thursday Think Tank prompt - Beach/Ocean


tarunima said...

strong imagery,it was like i was witnessing the scene with my eyes:)
i really like it:)
thanks for sharing!

bttrflyscar said...

if only...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oh I so relate to this one, Susannah! If only I could have stayed there forever.........sigh! Beautiful!

Rinkly Rimes said...

I found the first few stanzas very complelling.

Henry Clemmons said...

I'd like to live or capture the excitment of a daring moment. Very good. Enjoyed the images.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much for reading everyone. Your comments are really appreciated. x

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is a poem filled to the brim with explosive energy! You really captured the movement and power of the ocean and the effect it has on the psyche.

Andy said...

The sea, wind, rain, thunder all culminating in a fantastic energy rush.

Wonderful imagery!

Susannah said...

Thanks Kerry and Andy, your comments are much appreciated. :-)

Ella said...

I loved the charged alive feel I received reading this~ Really compelling!

Susannah said...

Thanks Ella. :-)

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