Tuesday, 30 November 2010

Punctured

Punctured by the broken promises
and ferocious regrets of yesterday
I hurl my words at the darkness
a never ending stream of verbs
juggling the intricate moments
I am no longer bent double
with some perceived modesty
I am lithe and dangerous
loping along on wolves feet
filled with a shapeless longing
No longer content to sit up there
on that warped and crooked pedestal
that you placed me on, way back
long before I learned
how to scream

- Susannah Bec 2010

Linked to One Shot Wednesday

29 comments:

Gordon Mason said...

Better out than in!! Liked the wolf image.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Whoa, this is really primal and powerful and quite WONDERFUL. I love the loping along on wolves feet, the coming off the pedestal and the learning to scream. Oh yeah, kiddo - I am Woman, hear me roar! Fantastic poem. I so love it!

Paul Andrew Russell said...

Very powerful and emotive, Susannah.

It's funny how we grow into ourselves and feel more comfortable as we get older.

liv2write2day said...

Ah, the damage done to us by trying to live up to expectations. Thought-provoking poem.

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giovannicucullo said...

Wow! I enjoyed this.
One would think that a puncture would deflate you, but very often we rise up, a few steps higher and that "little prick" becomes but a faded battle scar.

Deborah said...

Absolutely BRILLIANT!!

Desert Rose said...

L O V E ..I T ..:)) moved and touched! thank you for this amazing write..:)

Claudia said...

never ending stream of verbs and shapeless longing...longing can be so shapeless - right? we feel it's there somehow but we just can't say where exactly it starts and ends...really dig this

senderupwords said...

WOW... This is a great one shot. Love and Light, Sender

Eric Alder said...

Scream on, Susannah... howl at the moon, as is your right.

Nice One Shot!

Steve said...

Relatable, and true to the spirit of a spit-out, venom-laced scream. Good work.

booguloo said...

A great poem.. What a perfect forward to a Novel?

Shashi said...

Dear Susannah

Its a real beauty and made me feel it vividly in my thoughts...
Thanks for a wonderful One shot...

ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Susannah said...

Thanks very much everyone, I appreciate you taking the time to read and to comment.

booguloo - what a great idea! It would be wouldn't it. Thanks for that. :-)

Ladan Madobe said...

I like the urgency of this and the way it builds up to the ending, great write Susannah.

Carrie Burtt said...

I can feel the power and hurt in this amazing poem Susannah...a truly brilliant poem!

Susannah said...

Ladan and Carrie, thanks very much for taking the time to comment, it is appreciated.

It's good to see you both again. x

Jingle Poetry said...

masterful piece.
keep writing.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much for reading and for your comments, much appreciated.

Susannah x

annell said...

I loved this piece! Thanks

Susannah said...

Thanks annell. :-)

Kae. Y. R. said...

I love pieces where people personify themselves as animals, nicely done. Maybe we can be mutual admirers.
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Susannah said...

Thanks Kae. :-)

It is good to meet you, I look forward to checking out your blog.

Lynda Lehmann said...

WONDERFUL words that I can quite relate to! WELL DONE! A little shot in the arm for today...

I came by to wish you happy holidays, and the poem is pure serendipity!

Susannah said...

Hi Lynda, thank you so much for your kinf words and good wishes, they are very much appreciated.

Good to see you.

Michaela said...

Oh, yes, let's stand up for ourselves :-)

Susannah said...

Micheala, good to see you. x

Maya said...

sometimes i fear my need to scream... will it disturb the sleeping needs into flight? what then will happen? if all my needs seek freedom?

Susannah said...

Maya, I really understand where you are coming from with that comment. It is like opening the floodgates, once you start you have lost control. I used to be like that with tears, thinking if I started I would never stop. Great comment.

Good to see you. x

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