Monday, 22 November 2010

Winter

I will not speak of winter this year
for it will come silver footed
and bare knuckled
without any mention
of its name

And it will use its tricks
to make visible
my breath
my veins
and the red
that hides
beneath the surface
of my December
skin

And it will be silent
that edgy pen
that traces feathers
on cold glass
an artisan
working in
beauty
and in
ice

- Susannah Bec 2010

I am linking this poem to One Shot Wednesday

29 comments:

Gordon Mason said...

Great images and an interesting shape.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much Gordon, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and leave a comment.

Susannah :-)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oooh, I loved this! It builds and when it gets to "tracing feathers on cold glass" and "an artisan working in beauty and in ice" it made me appreciate the artistry - both winter's and yours:) Lovely.

Susannah said...

Thanks Sherry. :-)

I always enjoy seeing you here. I hope all is well with you. x

Poets United said...

I will not speak of winter this year
for it will come silver footed
and bare knuckled
without any mention
of its name

This opening is so wonderful. I think i read it at least 3 times before moving on to the rest of the poem. I always enjoy reading your poetry when I get the chance Susannah. You are such a gifted writer!! Thank you for sharing.

Susannah said...

Cheers Robb, much appreciated. :-)

Desert Rose said...

i like it susannah..its smooth and calming..i enjoyed the read,thank you for sharing :)

Susannah said...

Thanks DesertRose. :-)

mel said...

oh...this is lovely!!

(i'm not mentioning That Season either)

such vivid images..i can see the frost on the windowpane...

Carrie Burtt said...

I think this another favorite for me of yours Susannah....it is truly stunning! :-)

gospelwriter said...

Awesome poem, beautiful images of winter, loved silver footed
and bare knuckled
and

that edgy pen
that traces feathers
on cold glass


and for sure, winter comes whether we choose to speak of it or not...

Susannah said...

Mel, thank you. :-) It's good to meet you, thanks for visiting.


Thank you Carrie, it is good to see you again. :-)


Gospelwriter, thanks very much for your comment, much appreciated. :-)

One Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers and Artists said...

i loved...

and the red
that hides
beneath the surface
of my December
skin

wonderfully written...thanks for linking up with OSW...pete

Susannah said...

Thanks very much Pete. :-)

Dick Jones said...

This is a really nicely sustained piece of personification. Expressing winter as a human entity is, of course, as old an imagistic technique as poetry itself. So to make it work in a fresh and engaging way takes skill. Great stuff.

Old Ollie said...

Excellent work - love the imagery.

Eric Alder said...

I loved your excellent description of Winter as "silver footed and bare knuckled" - Nice One Shot, Susannah!

dustus said...

Your poem primes me for a battle with winter, and resolves the anticipation in artistic creation at the end. Nice One Shot!

Steve said...

Solid crone-season work.

Reflections said...

Great imagery! Still very interested in your form, set apart from other poetry I have read.

Charles said...

As someone who lives in a tropical climate....Your words bring home to me the essence of winter.

Shashi said...

Dear Susannah

I liked the vivid imagery that you have portrayed here.. thanks for sharing..

ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Susannah said...

Thanks everybody, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and leave a comment. :-)

Claudia said...

oh nice - revealing winter...this is beautiful

Fireblossom said...

This is beautiful, Susannah. A bare-knuckle artisan...that's a rare combination, but it suits Winter to a tee, doesn't it? Bravo.

Susannah said...

Claudia, thankyou. :-)



Fireblossom, yes it does. Thanks for your comment, it is muxh appreciated. x

liv2write2day said...

I missed this one last week--impressive picturre of winter's gifts.

J. Tabithia said...

You capture so much in as few words possible. I really like your style. This is a great poem especially for this time of the year. I read it at least three times through the first time I saw it.

Susannah said...

J Tabithia, thank you so much. :-)

It is good to see you here.

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