Saturday, 18 December 2010

Hunted

the grey wind stalks me
shadowing my moves
with endless grace

my pack is empty
I've nothing left
but turquoise

and there are
nine black dogs
trailing my scent

- Susannah Bec 2010

16 comments:

Deborah said...

Brilliant!

Fireblossom said...

I used to idolize Rita Coolidge, who always wore lots of turquoise. The black dogs never got *her*, so you may slip past them, too. ;-)

Charles said...

A surprising piece from you....a bit dark in overall tone....an unexpected ending.

Susannah said...

Deborah, thanks. ;-)



Fireblossom, I love your comment.
and I also love the dogs and as I move I just drop the food they like to eat, it keeps them well fed and it keeps me travelling light... and turquoise is my favourite colour. ;-) )



Hi Charles, good to see you. :-)
Darkness is in the interpretation maybe, but I see your point!

Carrie Burtt said...

Like Shay has spoken, turquoise will let you slip passed....this is a captivating piece Susannah! :-)

Susannah said...

Good to see you Carrie. :-)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

A rather haunting feeling to this poem. I love the "grey wind stalks me", and the nine dogs following. Good one, Susannah.

Susannah said...

Thanks Sherry. :-)

Elizabeth said...

I like the entire piece. It feels hunted, if not haunted on some level. I've been doing several pieces of Dead Man poem form, but making them Dead Woman poems. I think you might do very well with the form. Your images are very stark and evoke a lot of feelings.

Elizabeth

Susannah said...

Hi Elizabeth, thanks very much for your comment it is appreciated.

I shall have to look up the Dead Man poem form as it isn't something I've heard of.

Good to see you.

Juice Box said...

Your poetry astounds me, thanks for sharing and thanks for the comment. I'll most definately be keeping an eye out for more of your work.

Susannah said...

Juice box thanks for visiting. :-)

WINDOWLAD said...

Hola,

I just wanted to wish you a safe and peaceful Christmas...^^

Feliz Navidad!!! Dios nos bendiga a todos!!!^^

~Kelvin

Susannah said...

Thanks very much for your good wishes Kelvin. :-)

CathieT said...

Ooh, I like that. Tingles.

Susannah said...

Thanks Cathie. :-)

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