Tuesday, 31 May 2011

A Nice Neat Layer

I shake my life out onto a thin tray
and lift the edges and tap gently
so that the contents disperse
into a nice neat layer of me

there among the ingredients
I see things I have forgotten
things that must have slipped
right to the bottom of the mix

it really does pay occasionally
to empty your life out like that
so you can see all of the pieces
you'd been so sure were missing


© Susannah Bec 2011.

15 comments:

annell said...

Nice post. I like the idea of shaking it all out on a tray.

Poets United said...

This is an excellent piece. The imagery really lingers...and teaches about this moment. Glad I checked in.

M.C. said...

That is a really sweet and reflective poem.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

What a neat concept. If I dumped mine out on a tray, it would be big bulging lumps, like playdough, hee hee!

Rajesh said...

Sue,

I wish I could do it as well :)

Rajesh said...

@SBS: LOL

Elizabeth said...

Wonderful analogy. I would hope that my tray would have a net on the bottom and water flowing, so I could find all of the nuggests, no matter how small. Prospects too numurous to mention.

Elizabeth

Poets United said...

As Poets United reaches its first anniversary this coming week we want to thank you for your support. Over the past year we have grown to 250 members plus and are steadily growing. Poets United is proud to have you as one of our members and look forward to another successful year. You imagination, creativity and willingness to share with us is what makes our community such a wonderful place. Thank you for beautiful poetry and thank you for being a part of Poets United.

Poets United

Ena said...

What a beautiful poem. I've never thought of evaluating our life like that...

Renee said...

Well said, Susannah, for sometimes we need to do that to see where it is our journey need go next. Looking at ourselves sometimes has its' advantages. Nice piece.

Susannah said...

Thanks everyone for your lovely comments, they are much appreciated. :-)

It is always good to see you here. x

inspiredleo80 said...

What a great poem :) It's nice to do some self inventory once in a while. Glad I stopped by today to see your beautiful writing!

Susannah said...

Thanks inspiredleo, it is good to see you again. x

Divya said...

Hey Susannah.. what a beautiful poem and liked the theme and idea of sometimes emptying your life to see pieces..
Great piece.. Keep writing .

Susannah said...

Thanks very much Divya - and it is good to meet you. :-)

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