Monday 21 November 2011

Personal Evolution

She'd been trapped,
drowned in silence.
Oblivious to the planet
and its clockwork motion.

She had skated on thin ice,
started fires and left them to smolder.
She was a maverick, a firebrand,
she walked on a knife edge.

She was mindless, oblivious.
Unaware of the great universe,
and the fleeting spark
that was her life.

Until the diamond
of her consciousness,
was honed and polished.
Rough edges smoothed.

Then all of her facets
began to reflect the light.
And her clear eyes shone
with everything she was.

And in the vast blue sky
of her now peaceful mind.
She watched as her thoughts
went floating by like clouds.


This was written for this weeks Sunday Whirl.

13 comments:

California Ink in Motion said...

This was fabulous! A personal awakening.

Then all of her facets
began to reflect the light.
And her clear eyes shone
with everything she was.

Very nicely written.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much. :-)

Good to see you. x

Christine said...

Beautiful journey in this, truly breathtaking words to describe hope.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much Christine. :-)

Renee said...

Sometimes life seems to pass us by and when we catch up to it the changes are remarkable. I especially like "Unaware of the great universe" as that is sometimes how it feels. Nicely written.

Susannah said...

Thanks very much Renee, it is good to see you. x

teri said...

Just lovely. It made me wish I was a maverick-even for a moment.

Susannah said...

:-) Good to see you Teri. x

Other Mary said...

So many of us go through life oblivious to what's around us.

Laura Maria said...

Beautiful and intruiging, the last two lines especially.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Beautiful, Susannah, the journey of growth......so well portrayed.

Susie Clevenger said...

From unaware to aware...a beautiful piece!

Jinksy said...

Had to smile at the mention of clockwork, in view of my post HERE today!

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