Friday, 20 August 2010

Shall we. . .

Shall we sing a different song this time
one that makes the leaves quiver like
a gentle breeze is passing by

Shall we take a different route this time
one that leads through wooded valleys
and meanders beside a tiny stream

Shall we try to understand this time
that we are two separate people
who are walking the same road



- Susannah Bec 2010

22 comments:

Ladan said...

I like the choice of the "shall we" and the beginning of each verse. The ending is also quite conclusive, i really like this one Susannah.

Lynette Killam said...

Wonderful poem, Susannah! I'm so glad you stopped by my page, so I might find yours. I've peeked at a few of your pieces and will definitely come back when I have more time. May I also say that your blog itself is a thing of beauty! I love your header and description..

Susannah said...

Hi Ladan, Thanks very much, I am glad you liked it.

Food to see you. :-)

Susannah said...

Hi Lynette, thanks very much for your kind words. I was very glad to have discovered both of your blogs today and have bookmarked them so I can keep in touch with your posts.

It is really good to meet you. :-)

Susannah said...

Ladan, I meant good to see you, not food to see you! (It made me giggle when I saw my typo!)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

OH! MY! GOODNESS! This is the poem that should be handed to every couple starting out - do you think we can get it included as part of the wedding ceremony? Absolutely brilliant! And wise! Wonderful!

Susannah said...

Hi Sherry, thanks as always for your lovely comment, it is always really great to see you. :-)

Square Corner said...

Susannah, I am so glad I discovered your poetry. You truly have a gift with words. I am new at Poets United, I am happy to be part of this poetry "scene". Look forward to reading your other poems.

Susannah said...

Hi Square Corner, thanks for visiting, it is good to meet you. :-)

flaubert said...

Susannah this is so pretty!
thanks for the visit!
Pamela

Susannah said...

Thanks Pamela, it is good to meet you. :-)

Bobbie Sandlin said...

Thank you for your recent comment :) I love your writing and your blog. Look forward to seeing more writing from you.

Susannah said...

Thanks Bobbie. :-)

Look forward to reading more of your writing and looking at those wonderful Mandalas!

Good to meet you. :-)

Arian Tejano said...

your poem is like a song- grand in its comeliness.

Susannah said...

Thank you so much Arian :-)

Jinksy said...

I like the different route that lead me here - I shall be back...

Susannah said...

Thanks for visiting - I look forward to seeing you again jinksy! :-)

rashmi said...

Hi Susannah,
Nice poem.felt the breeze myself......breeze...yes the leaves quivering.I feel like looking at 2 people walking through a road among woods and a soft breeze touching them...nice dear.

Susannah said...

Hi Rashmi, I am glad you could experience it that way. :-)

It is very nice to meet you.

Charles said...

That ending...."Two separate people walking the same road" You had me reminiscing.

Susannah said...

Good to see you Charles, thanks for dropping in. :-)

Poets United said...

Ah I love the dance of life your show us here. It works so well with me right now. Thank you for sharing.

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