The wind whipped her hair
wrapping it around her face
she reached up and pushed it
back behind her ears
She was too close to the edge
she knew it but didn't care
It was exhilarating
to feel the spray from the crashing waves
to feel the storm building
She squinted her eyes
against the rushing wind
licking her lips
tasting the salt
tasting the ocean
Towering clouds raced across the bruised sky
grey and purple, like a vast mountain range
Her heart was racing
low rumbles of thunder moved closer
the air crackled with electricity
The silver black ocean
hurled itself at the shore
crashing over the slippery rocks
She was soaked to the skin
wet strands of hair
wound around her neck
her eyes stinging
and streaming with tears
Streaks of lightning
turned the sky into a lightbox
and the waves roared
the thunder crashed
and she could no longer hear herself think
She screamed into the sound
joining it
adding her energy
She felt passion run through her like a storm
and she was the waves crashing
and the arcing lights
in the electric sky
She felt the thunder
like a force within
. . . and the wind just kept on howling
She fell to her knees
clinging on to the slippery black slate
she was spent
charged
alive
One thought repeating
over and over in her ocean filled mind
If only I could stay here
forever. . .
wrapping it around her face
she reached up and pushed it
back behind her ears
She was too close to the edge
she knew it but didn't care
It was exhilarating
to feel the spray from the crashing waves
to feel the storm building
She squinted her eyes
against the rushing wind
licking her lips
tasting the salt
tasting the ocean
Towering clouds raced across the bruised sky
grey and purple, like a vast mountain range
Her heart was racing
low rumbles of thunder moved closer
the air crackled with electricity
The silver black ocean
hurled itself at the shore
crashing over the slippery rocks
She was soaked to the skin
wet strands of hair
wound around her neck
her eyes stinging
and streaming with tears
Streaks of lightning
turned the sky into a lightbox
and the waves roared
the thunder crashed
and she could no longer hear herself think
She screamed into the sound
joining it
adding her energy
She felt passion run through her like a storm
and she was the waves crashing
and the arcing lights
in the electric sky
She felt the thunder
like a force within
. . . and the wind just kept on howling
She fell to her knees
clinging on to the slippery black slate
she was spent
charged
alive
One thought repeating
over and over in her ocean filled mind
If only I could stay here
forever. . .
This is an older piece that I have altered and partially rewritten
for the Thursday Think Tank prompt - Beach/Ocean
for the Thursday Think Tank prompt - Beach/Ocean
11 comments:
Wow!
strong imagery,it was like i was witnessing the scene with my eyes:)
i really like it:)
thanks for sharing!
if only...
Oh I so relate to this one, Susannah! If only I could have stayed there forever.........sigh! Beautiful!
I found the first few stanzas very complelling.
I'd like to live or capture the excitment of a daring moment. Very good. Enjoyed the images.
Thanks very much for reading everyone. Your comments are really appreciated. x
This is a poem filled to the brim with explosive energy! You really captured the movement and power of the ocean and the effect it has on the psyche.
The sea, wind, rain, thunder all culminating in a fantastic energy rush.
Wonderful imagery!
Thanks Kerry and Andy, your comments are much appreciated. :-)
I loved the charged alive feel I received reading this~ Really compelling!
Thanks Ella. :-)
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