*
luminous, lit up
she bent like a willow
so that she wouldn't break
touching the ground
with green fingers
she was reaching
down into the
earth
he
studied
the negative
stroking the surface
polishing the reflections
and making them
shine
Between them
the electrons flowed
completing a circuit
so much electricity
you could feel it
crackling
in the
air
*
- Susannah Bec 2010
This was written for a prompt - the three prompt words to be used were - break, negative, surface
Taken from my prompt writing blog - Panopticulated
14 comments:
Great response to the prompt! I especially love "luminous, lit up she bent like a willow", and the green fingers reaching down into the earth. And the "crackling in the air." Good one!
Thanks Sherry. :-)
I love this its so magical.
Thanks Ladan.
It's good to see you. :-)
I love everything about this poem - its shape, its heady idea of passion and each carefully chosen word.
I lov ethis entire poem!! Its so nature and passion rolled into one big ball of yum! I especially loved
"so much electricity
you could feel it
crackling
in the
air"
It is a great end to the poem. I really enjoyed reading this 3 or 4 times lol. xoxo Nith
Love it, Susannah, mo dose of Romance for the day - (I live vicariously, if at all, hee hee) You write so wonderfully.
And isn't it beautiful when that happens? :-) I'm smiling here.
Really effective combination of form and message, Susannah.
I like the visual form of this, Susannah, and the words are beautiful. A lovely poem.
Susannah,
I read your words and a connection was very obvious!
Very clever....
Best wishes, Eileen
Hey everyone, great to see you and thanks so much for the comments. x
Your words are electrifying. :) I love the shape of the poem as well.
My Poetry Pantry poems: The Likido Diet, Mood Rings of the Future, and Smiley Sociology Study #3 – Time Travel (a link exchange / writing prompt).
outstanding poem,
love the imagery and more.
keep it up.
xoxox
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