Afterwards. . .

Tuesday, 14 June 2011

Afterwards. . .

You stretched the sky
with your poets hands
trailing feather fingers
across my acres of blue

Windspun and wanton
the high flying bird of me
cartwheeled and blustered
on the thermals of your breath

After you had gone...
becalmed and bewildered
I fluttered down to earth
my soaring song, silent

© Susannah Bec 2011.

29 comments:

annell4 said...: Your poem is so beautiful! Thank you for this post!; 14 June 2011 at 13:40
Susannah said...: Thanks very much Annell. :-)

It is good to see you here.; 14 June 2011 at 16:03
Sherry Blue Sky said...: Oh, this is GLORIOUS - I can see the soaring bird, the sudden fall, and hear the "soaring song, silent". Wow, Susannah!; 14 June 2011 at 17:08
Deborah said...: Oooh Beauiful!; 14 June 2011 at 19:19
Susannah said...: Thanks very much Sherry and Deborah, I am glad you liked it. :-); 14 June 2011 at 19:54
Asobime said...: How did I miss this!

A marvelous poem!

This touched me deeply, moved me this morning.

Hauntingly good.

Lady Nyo; 15 June 2011 at 13:40
Susannah said...: Thanks so much Lady Nyo. :-); 15 June 2011 at 15:07
Kerry O'Connor said...: Oh that opening stanza is too too potently beautiful, Susannah. And each successive line continues to enhance the meaning.

Thank you so much for your wishes on my birthday - I appreciate the thought very much.; 15 June 2011 at 17:16
Susannah said...: Thanks very much Kerry. :-)

(I hope you are having a wonderful day! x); 15 June 2011 at 17:24
Elizabeth said...: What a beautiful way of seeing inspiration in action, feeling each movement, and the coming down. Wonderful Susannah,

Elizabeth; 17 June 2011 at 03:38
Susannah said...: Thanks very much Elizabeth, it is good to see you here. x; 17 June 2011 at 08:23
Lynette Killam said...: This poem swept me up and carried me along on its sweeping journey...just what poetry is meant to do. I enjoyed that thoroughly!

And thank you so much for the kind words you left on my Oreo post, Susannah. It is a difficult time, indeed, but is made a little easier by blogging friends like you...:); 17 June 2011 at 16:32
Susannah said...: Thank you very much Lynette. x; 17 June 2011 at 17:02
Rajesh said...: Quite a roller coaster this one! Like love in high tide. Wonderful sue.; 18 June 2011 at 15:33
Susannah said...: Thanks Rajesh. :-); 18 June 2011 at 15:40
Marian said...: yes yes! this is beautiful. i could eat it up. yum.; 19 June 2011 at 23:38
Susannah said...: Thanks Marian. :-); 20 June 2011 at 00:17
Liz Rice-Sosne said...: This is beautiful, lush with sensuousness. Thermals? Do you fly?; 20 June 2011 at 03:38
Isabel Doyle said...: beautiful; 20 June 2011 at 06:10
Jinksy said...: Windspun and wanton

What a joy! ♥; 20 June 2011 at 10:58
Anonymous said...: Afterwards? More memories to come?; 20 June 2011 at 14:47
Susannah said...: Thanks everyone for your comments on this. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. x; 20 June 2011 at 15:42
Anonymous said...: Greetings from Southern California

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BTW, Nice Poem! :-); 20 June 2011 at 16:28
Unknown said...: What a wondrous ride. Tight, yet richly sensual metaphors let the reader imagine even more.
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/06/20/blue-melancholy/; 20 June 2011 at 18:11
Brother Ollie said...: Love this poem - the imagery is perfect.

Thanks for your kind comments.; 20 June 2011 at 19:56
Brian Miller said...: sigh...lovely...stretched on poet fingers, not a bad place to be...smiles.; 21 June 2011 at 17:17
Susannah said...: Thanks very much all....it is good to see you. x; 21 June 2011 at 18:37
Unknown said...: A most beautiful piece!; 21 June 2011 at 19:24
Renee said...: Beautiful! The words show such wonder, such passion! Nicely done!; 22 June 2011 at 04:52