I am a bowl
a useful vessel
an empty space
waiting to be filled
I am clean and shiny
hollow and expectant
I wait for your need
but I dream of the day
that I may enter the garden
and catch the sweet raindrops
so that birds may drink from me
and when the velvet night gallops
sweeping fleet across the sleeping land
I will hold my circle up to the sky
and capture the silver moon
and all the million stars
dancing and shimmering
on my dark water surface
no longer an empty receptacle
but fulfilling my purpose
gathering starlight and tending to birds
The last line keeps changing, this is third one that has been published! Not to mention the two that weren't. It may well change again. . . I am having trouble settling on one purpose - but then again, perhaps that is the nature of bowls? ;-)
Inspired by the thursday think tank prompt
- to write from the perspective of an inanimate object
© Susannah Bec 2011
- to write from the perspective of an inanimate object
© Susannah Bec 2011
23 comments:
This was so beautiful; it made me think of the Velveteen Rabbit! The wish to be useful and loved~
Thanks Ella. :-)
What a lovely imagining! A bowl yearning to leave the kitchen tap and be filled with starlight.
Thanks Rinkly Rhymes. . . yes, even bowls have dreams. :-)
Beautifully done!
Thanks Annell. :-)
What a very lovely write.
That was exquisite. The bowl is just like us. We don't just want to fill emptiness; we want to fill it with beautiful things.
Thanks thingy. :-)
Madhumakhi - yes you are right. :-)
Thanks very much for dropping in. x
Susannah,
A nice thought, since my bird baths are both overflowing with rain water!
Best wishes, Eileen
gorgeous
Eileen and Bttrflyscar, thanks very much. Good to see you. :-)
So very nice. You made this object very likeable. A bowl would only have the simplest needs. Also, my daughter absolutely loves birds.
I so love this one, Susannah, which says so much more than it appears to say. I totally love your last line! And the night galloping across the sleeping land.........and it capturing the moon and stars. Magnificent images and speaks to the reader's wish to be of purpose, like the bowl......just a lovely read.
I would leave it as is. Especially the last stanza.
What a lovely poem!
Thanks everyone for your lovely comments, they are much appreciated. x
I like how you've captured the bowl's perspective.
Nicely done!
Absolutely wonderful I really love "Hollow and expectant"
Thanks very much all. :-)
awesome expression.
stay upbeat.
Such haunting imagery. You are very talented.:)
Thanks Jingle. :-)
Jo thanks very much for your kind words. :-)
It is good to meet you. x
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