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The Thursday Think Tank - Prompt #9
S A N C T U A R Y
the Poetry Blogroll - Poets United
The Thursday Think Tank - Prompt #9
S A N C T U A R Y
My first time writing from a poetry prompt, but the title of this one spoke to me. :-)
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Behind the facade
the kerb appeal
of outer skin
are many rooms
each has a
wooden door
some lead
to tiny spaces
filled with books
another to a vast hall
where there is dancing
from some
you can hear
the strains
of distant music
or bird song,
or the gentle lapping of waves
some doors are ajar
shedding spangles of light
some are tightly closed
but their handles are
bright and shiny
from use
but, there is one special door
It is painted turquoise
richly decorated with birds
and seashells and sparkling with
pieces of sea tumbled glass
it has a perfect heart shaped keyhole
opened by the little gold key
that hangs from the ribbon
around my neck
it is the door
to the sanctuary
the one
that exists
inside
me
*
*
Behind the facade
the kerb appeal
of outer skin
are many rooms
each has a
wooden door
some lead
to tiny spaces
filled with books
another to a vast hall
where there is dancing
from some
you can hear
the strains
of distant music
or bird song,
or the gentle lapping of waves
some doors are ajar
shedding spangles of light
some are tightly closed
but their handles are
bright and shiny
from use
but, there is one special door
It is painted turquoise
richly decorated with birds
and seashells and sparkling with
pieces of sea tumbled glass
it has a perfect heart shaped keyhole
opened by the little gold key
that hangs from the ribbon
around my neck
it is the door
to the sanctuary
the one
that exists
inside
me
*
- Susannah Bec 2010
32 comments:
Susannah,
A really delightful read, which ultimately leads into your place of sanctuary.
Eileen
Thanks very much Eileen. :-)
Love the flow of this poem and how it builds up to and leads you to the true sanctuary...inside of you.
Beautiful poetry! :-)
Thanks Carrie. :-)
Is kerb a typo? Don't know what it means although I looked it up. I like the form of your poem and how it leads to your own personal sanctuary. Very well written!
Hi Diane, trying googling 'kerb appeal' perhaps the expression is not used in the US?
Thanks very much for your visit, It's good to meet you. :-)
very nice writing.
Thanks very much Gerry. :-)
A FANTASTIC poem! I love it so much! The "many rooms", one "where there is dancing", the sounds of "bird song or gentle lapping of waves". And how beautifully decorated with favorite things is the door to your inner sanctuary. A wonderful poem, I loved every bit of it!!!!!
Hi Sherry, I am so glad you liked it.
Thanks very much for your positive comments, I really do appreciate them.
It is good to see you fellow ocean lover. ;-)
This is beautiful, Susannah, especially the following stanza...
'It is painted turquoise
richly decorated with birds
and seashells and sparkling with
pieces of sea tumbled glass'
I really enjoyed reading this poem.
Thanks very much Paul and I am glad to see that you have joined up at Poets United too!
It is always nice to see you. :-)
This is really beautiful. I love that you wrote of the sanctuary within, as mine is there too!
Thanks Felicitas, I think the lucky ones of us find that sanctuary inside. Glad you have too. :-)
It is good to meet you.
you should try some of your poetry at the Conjunction forums -- http://conjunction.webs.com/apps/forums/
they offer great critique there, nice community.
also, feel free to visit The God Bolt, http://thegodbolt.blogspot.com
and i look forward to reading more of your work
Thanks Oren, I will check them out.
Thank you for your visit, it is nice to meet you. :-)
pleasant piece.
excellent first time entry for a prompt.
Thanks for your comment Jingle.
Susannah, Thank you for visiting my site and leaving such kind comments. It means a great deal, coming from such an accomplished poet as yourself:)
Sherry, I have been so enjoying your writing, I am glad to have discovered your blog and you. :-)
Dear Susannah,
I love the shape and sound of your poetry especially...
it is the door
to the sanctuary
the one
that exists
inside
me
Lovely!
Thanks very much ninotaziz. :-)
It is nice to meet you.
I like your visual technique on this one.
Thanks very much David. :-)
I want to come to this "house" too.
I want to roam every room.
And I want to dance to the music.
And I want to listen to the sound of the waves.. ah, wonderful.
It is wonderful to see you Michaela, thank you very much for visiting. :-)
very nice poem... I love the flow and the culmination of the true sanctuary! I'll definitely check back often!
Hello dc and thanks for your comment - it's good to meet you. :-)
The many rooms I believe is the many moods we display....In the end we can only be our true selves....We return to the sanctuary.
Hello Charles, good to see you again. Thanks for your comment. :-)
Ahhhhhh, I'm liking this. Keep that key close...everyone needs a sanctuary. :-)
Thanks Fireblossom!
It's good to meet you. :-)
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