His gentle hands land on my shoulders like doves,
I feel their warm weight seep down into my muscles,
imagined sky and soft grey feathers bring comfort.
My eyelids fall, slowly shutting out the untidy world.
The patterned crowds and tangled electric wires, gone.
High speeds trains departed, slamming doors erased.
Unblown dandelions awaiting the puff of my cheeks,
sky whirled and ready, floating aloft as my thoughts
tumble and roll, down the steep daisy flecked bank,
splashing and sinking into the wet giggling brook below.
A single moment explodes into tangents, fracturing light,
the kaleidoscope turns, one eye closed, another scene
Illuminates, inspires, exists for one precious instant.
The doves take flight, I am left, calm, unassuming, yet
stained and imbued with a strange and ferocious beauty.
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17 comments:
This is so visually beautiful, and soft, the doves, the unblown dandelions, the turning kaleidoscope....a pervasive mood of calmness and beauty, and then your last line - such perfection.
exquisitely written...I can feel the relief and release in my own flesh reading your words. Beautiful.
Beautiful as always, Susannah. The image of hands landing like doves is brilliant; such gentleness.
Amazing what warmth and a beautiful moment can wipe away of a difficult day...love this Susannah! :-)
Susannah, some wonderful imagery in this.
Pamela
ferocious beauty...that will stay with me...some fun imagery...the dandelions...the splashing...and the sated ending...tight.
Thank you very much for your wonderful poem. You distinguish yourself among the Oneshot contributors. And I am honored to be able to leave you my comments.
I know this thing you call "a strange and ferocious beauty". It is a strong chord in many of my poems and more importantly in my life experience. "Exploding tangents" of light is what a mystic sees that makes a "single moment" stretch a mighty long way. The shaman knows this. She lives in two worlds harvesting treasure from one and ministering to the ill in the other.
Your words and the facility in which you craft them, show me that you are one of these people. Of course, you get to decide how far you want to take this. Unless, perhaps, one of the treasures washed up onto your beach is a message in a bottle from the deeper realms of spirit world which says, "Need your light badly in this world. Can you help?"
Keep turning the Kaleidoscope.
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Wow! What wonderful lines. So many images, nature, love, affection, warmth, expectations, ..... coming together. This is wonderful... beautiful. This is my fav :)
Absolutely BEAUTIFUL ... I simply loved this!
very very beautiful ..I wonder if you know the song http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iPWhZMsoXsU link may not work . Called < One Dove by Antony and the Johnsons ? Anyway after reading this I had to go and listen ..Its the same space in the heart that dove comes from as in your poem :)
Moonskinlight ~
Dear Susannah
Its vivid imagery made me relate to it so much.. very lovely. Thanks for sharing..
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Tough style - well done.
Thanks very much every one for taking the time to read and comment, it is much appreciated.
Good to see you all.
Susannah :-)
"Unblown dandelions awaiting the puff of my cheeks," I enjoyed your descriptions that were a bit different than any I have heard and just wonderful to read.
I enjoyed this write so much!
gentle like breeze, love your words.
Really beautiful word choices... and now I want a massage! :-)
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